Dear diary
yesterday was the worst day ever, the savages (jacks group) attacked us yesterday during our already unmerciful slumber, Ralph and Eric put up a pretty good fight, against each other i had seen them fighting each other while I was cowering in the corner. Seconds before we were attacked I was thinking that things couldn’t get worse and about what they did to me. Piggy wrote as he gesticulated with the hand he wasn't write.
Jack had stifled and smothered my face with his hand so that I couldn't say or see anything. it was dark and all i could do was feel and that wasn't much help because all i felt was someone jump on me and steel my glasses.I can't see. I don't have much self esteem to start with but to have Ralph hold my and to go places it makes me feel like I'm a little kid.
Ever since I have been stranded on this island I've been teased, hit, and humiliated but none of that stuff doesn’t bother me I'm used to it but nothing makes me crackers like when I get my precious glasses tooken away.
Seconds before the attack I was watching the phosphorescent sky and then I got a crazy shudder which only happens when something bad is about to happen it is sort of a spidey sense
conch
fire
simon
jack
beastie
piggy
ralph
glasses
Hunters vs ET
et go home
4 comments:
unpeacful - unpeaceful? write - right or write? steel- steal-to take steel- a material.
Clever idea using a diary to convey piggy's thoughts but try watching out for those teeny spelling mistakes.
Anthony-
I thought that this was a pretty good entry. You included plenty of opinion of how Piggy's glasses were stolen. Also I liked how you listen to the option Mr. Shaddox gave about making it an actual diary entry. I thought it was a different way of writing, but it worked out.
I do think that you could have added a bit better of a conclusion instead of just saying "...it is sort of a spidey sense." Other than that, great job.
Write the other blogs? -5 days later-
Anthony,
Great job I think that you did a good job on using details and at first I didn't Know who's perspective you were talking from but then you talked about how he was treated bad on the island which made it clear. I also love how you made it a diary entry.
-Amber
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